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Title PH Women's Curling Team Routs Hong Kong in Asian Winter Games A Boost for Philippine Sports

The 9th Asian Winter Games, held in Harbin, China, has gotten off to a remarkable start for the Philippines. The country's women's curling team, led by Kathleen Dubberstein, convincingly defeated Hong Kong with a score of 7-2 on Sunday at the Harbin Pingfang Curling Arena.

This resounding victory is not only a testament to the team's hard work and dedication but also a much-needed boost for Philippine sports in general. The excitement surrounding this win is palpable, and we can't help but feel proud of our athletes' achievements.

What contributed to their success? Let's take a closer look

A Strong Start Team Philippines began strongly, with Leilani Sumbillo and Sheila Mariano holding Hong Kong scoreless in the first four ends. This momentum-building start set the tone for the rest of the game.

A Unified Squad Kathleen Dubberstein, Anne Bonache, and Jennifer dela Fuente all played crucial roles in their team's victory. Their collective effort was truly impressive!

As the Asian Winter Games continue, our athletes will face new challenges and opportunities. For now, we're relishing the glory of this impressive win.

In other news, Peter Groseclose fell short in the quarterfinals of the men's 1000m in short track speed skating, while Francis Ceccarelli suffered disqualification in his first run in the men's slalom competition. Although these results were disappointing, we're confident that our athletes will learn from their experiences and come back stronger.

Upcoming Events

The Figure Skating competition gets underway on Tuesday, with Paolo Borromeo competing in the men's short program, followed by Isabella Gamez and Aleksander Korovin in the pair event. Sofia Frank and Cathryn Limketkai will also take to the ice for their women's short program.

Meanwhile, Laetaz Amihan Rabe will compete in the women's freeski slopestyle at the Freeski Slopestyle Stadium in Yabuli Ski Resort.

As we look ahead to these upcoming events, we're filled with excitement and anticipation. Will our athletes continue to make us proud? Only time will tell!

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CEO / Co-Founder

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