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Expanding Coverage Sen. Bong Go Urges PhilHealth to Step Up on TB and HIV Treatments

As the global health landscape continues to evolve, it is imperative that our healthcare systems adapt to meet the growing needs of patients worldwide. In the Philippines, Senator Bong Go is calling for increased investment in healthcare programs, emphasizing the need for expanded coverage for tuberculosis (TB) and human immunodeficiency virus (HIV) treatments.

A Call to Action

Senator Go's appeal comes at a time when foreign aid on some government health programs has been reduced. The US State Department issued a stop-work order on January 24, affecting various forms of assistance, including USAid. In response, Senator Go is urging the government to invest more in healthcare and reduce dependence on foreign aid.

Lessons from Covid-19

The senator's call for stronger self-reliance and increased investment in healthcare programs draws lessons from the Covid-19 pandemic. As we have seen during this global crisis, it is essential that our healthcare systems are equipped to respond effectively to emerging challenges. Expanding coverage for TB and HIV treatments is a critical step towards achieving this goal.

The Impact of Reduced Foreign Aid

During a Senate committee hearing on February 12, Senator Go asked the Department of Health (DOH) about the impact of reduced foreign aid on the country's efforts to combat HIV and TB. According to DOH Assistant Secretary Albert Domingo, while foreign aid provides critical assistance, government funding remains the backbone of these programs.

PhilHealth's Critical Role

Senator Go is urging PhilHealth to step up and expand its coverage for HIV and TB patients. PhilHealth should ensure that HIV and TB patients receive adequate support, he emphasized. With the increasing number of newly diagnosed HIV cases reported monthly since 2021, it is more crucial than ever that our healthcare systems are equipped to provide effective treatment and care.

Conclusion

As we move forward in 2025, it is essential that we prioritize expanding coverage for TB and HIV treatments. By investing in these critical programs, we can revolutionize the way we approach healthcare and ensure that patients receive the support they need. With PhilHealth at the forefront of this effort, we can make a significant impact on the lives of those affected by these diseases.

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