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Honoring a Legacy Paying Tribute to Elder Brother Gyalo Thondup

As news of his passing spread, His Holiness the Dalai Lama was deeply saddened by the loss of his elder brother, Gyalo Thondup. With great humility and reverence, the Dalai Lama took time to reflect on the life and legacy of this remarkable individual.

Born in 1913, Gyalo Thondup was a devoted Buddhist practitioner and a close companion to His Holiness throughout their lives. Their bond was rooted in shared values of compassion, wisdom, and service to others. As brothers, they were united by their love for Buddhism and their commitment to spreading its teachings.

Throughout his life, Gyalo Thondup was an exemplary model of kindness, generosity, and selflessness. He spent many years studying and practicing meditation, cultivating a deep understanding of the Buddhist path. His wisdom, gained through years of contemplation, inspired countless individuals, including His Holiness himself.

The Dalai Lama fondly recalls his brother's unwavering dedication to the betterment of society. Gyalo Thondup was an ardent advocate for social justice and human rights, often working tirelessly behind the scenes to bring about positive change. His selfless efforts to help others were a testament to his boundless compassion and generosity.

As we pay tribute to Gyalo Thondup's remarkable legacy, the Dalai Lama encourages us all to reflect on our own values and priorities. May his life and teachings inspire us to strive for greater kindness, wisdom, and service to others.

In closing, the Dalai Lama offers his heartfelt condolences to Gyalo Thondup's family and friends, and he asks that we take a moment to honor this remarkable individual by embracing his virtues and continuing his work in our own lives.

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