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House Holds Emotional Necrological Service for Late Rep. Edcel Lagman

The House of Representatives gathered on Wednesday to pay tribute to Albay 2nd District Representative Edcel Lagman, who passed away at the age of 82 due to cardiac arrest. As his remains lay in state at the House session hall, lawmakers and officials delivered heartfelt eulogies and shared stories about the late congressman.

Former Speaker Feliciano Belmonte Jr. described Rep. Lagman as a man of unwavering integrity, principle, and conviction. He noted that besides the landmark laws Lagman fought for, he left behind fond memories of his wit, candor, wisdom, and eloquence.

House Speaker Martin Romualdez remembered Rep. Lagman as a statesman in the truest sense of the word, a mentor to many, a fierce but respectful opponent, and above all, a man who understood that democracy is built on dialogue, not uniformity. He encouraged those in public service to learn from Rep. Lagman's example.

Rep. Lagman's eldest daughter, Tabaco Mayor Krisel Lagman, thanked the House for paying tribute to her father. She acknowledged his absence would leave a void but urged those who had been touched by him to carry on and continue championing the rights of the poor.

As a lawyer and lawmaker, Rep. Lagman served in all three branches of government and authored several landmark legislations, including the Responsible Parenthood and Reproductive Health Law, Anti-Enforced or Involuntary Disappearance Act, and Human Rights Victims Reparation and Recognition Act. He also wrote a column for The Manila Times.

Rep. Lagman's legacy as a relentless champion of human rights and the Filipino people will be remembered by those in Congress and beyond. His passing leaves a void not just in Congress but also in public service, but his example and legacy will continue to inspire future generations of lawmakers and advocates.

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