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Shining a Light on Sustainability SM Prime's 7.5-MWp Solar Deployment Boosts Renewable Energy Use

As a leading real estate developer in the Philippines, SM Prime Holdings Inc. has taken a significant step towards reducing its environmental footprint with the deployment of a 7.5-megawatt peak (MWp) solar power system. This major undertaking not only showcases the company's commitment to sustainability but also marks a milestone in the country's transition to renewable energy.

The solar deployment, which was completed earlier this year, is expected to significantly reduce SM Prime's reliance on fossil fuels and lower its carbon emissions. The project is part of the company's long-term strategy to minimize its environmental impact while maintaining its operations and growth.

The 7.5-MWp solar power system is one of the largest in the Philippines and is designed to generate enough electricity to power over 1,000 average-sized homes. The installation features state-of-the-art photovoltaic (PV) panels and inverters, which are expected to provide a reliable source of clean energy.

SM Prime's commitment to sustainability is reflected in its various initiatives aimed at reducing waste, conserving resources, and promoting environmental stewardship. The company has set ambitious targets for reducing its carbon emissions and is exploring innovative solutions to achieve these goals.

The successful deployment of the 7.5-MWp solar power system marks a significant achievement in SM Prime's sustainability journey. As the country continues to grapple with climate change, it is essential that companies like SM Prime take bold steps towards embracing renewable energy and reducing their environmental impact.

With this project, SM Prime has set a new standard for corporate responsibility and sustainability in the real estate sector. The company's commitment to reducing its carbon footprint and promoting renewable energy will undoubtedly have a positive impact on the environment and contribute to a more sustainable future for generations to come.

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Edward Lance Arellano Lorilla

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