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The Evolution of Pablo Continues as Petro Gazz Rolls

Manila, Philippines - The Petro Gazz Angels have extended their winning streak to six matches after defeating the Zus Coffee Thunderbelles in a thrilling four-set encounter (25-20, 24-26, 28-26, 25-22) at the PhilSports Arena during the 2025 PVL All-Filipino Conference on Tuesday.

Petro Gazz's Winning Formula

Led by Brooke Van Sickle, Petro Gazz has been riding a wave of success, with Myla Pablo playing a key role in their winning ways. The veteran player has rediscovered her lethal form this conference, and her latest performance was no exception.

Myla Pablo's Explosive Output

Pablo led the charge for Petro Gazz, notching a conference-high 22 points against the Thunderbelles to secure the win. This victory boosts the Angels' record to an impressive 7-1, placing them at the top of the team standings with 21 points.

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