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Two Comelec Commissioners Retire A Change in Leadership, But Business as Usual at the Commission

The Commission on Elections (Comelec) has undergone a significant change with the retirement of two commissioners, Socorro Inting and Marlon Casquejo. Their departure marks the end of their seven-year terms, during which they played crucial roles in shaping the commission's decisions.

A Shift in Leadership

Although the retirements have brought about a change in leadership, the Comelec en banc remains fully functional, with sufficient members to continue its operations and make key decisions. Chairman George Erwin Garcia emphasized that the commission is well-equipped to handle ongoing election cases and other matters that require approval.

We are still five members strong in the en banc, although it would be ideal to have a full commission, Garcia explained. However, we will continue to operate effectively with our current composition.

The Call for New Appointments

Garcia has appealed to President Ferdinand Marcos Jr. to appoint new commissioners as soon as possible. He highlighted the importance of having a complete and functional commission, emphasizing that a seven-member body is more effective than a five-member one.

A full commission allows us to make decisions with a majority in each division, Garcia said. It would also enable us to have a presiding officer in every division.

The Benefits of Insider Appointments

Garcia emphasized the benefits of appointing someone from within the commission to fill the vacancies. He noted that an insider would require minimal time to familiarize themselves with the commission's processes and operations.

Appointing someone from within the commission would be a wise decision, as they are already knowledgeable about our operations, Garcia said.

The Authority to Make Appointments

Garcia stressed that the President has the authority to make appointments without violating any election-related laws. He prefers that an insider be appointed, citing their familiarity with the commission's processes and operations.

An outsider would require at least two years to familiarize themselves with our operations, Garcia said. In contrast, an insider would already possess this knowledge.

Looking Ahead

As we bid farewell to Inting and Casquejo, it is essential to look ahead to the future of psychiatric research. Will their retirement mark a new era of innovation and discovery in this field?

Conclusion

The retirements of Comelec commissioners Inting and Casquejo may signal changes ahead, but for now, business as usual will continue at the commission. As we move forward, it is crucial to remember that innovation and progress can come from within or outside the field.

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1. Simplified sentence structure and language to make the text more accessible.
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4. Added transitions between paragraphs to improve the flow of the text.
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